“Summer Haiku”

Summer Haiku

Awakened before sun’s rise
A sound inside my dream
Crashing ocean on distant shore
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(c)7.23.17 Jessan Dunn Otis
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4 thoughts on ““Summer Haiku”

  1. vkgsimla

    Good one but a Haiku should conform to 5-7-5 syllables meter.
    In my opinion, you can edit it as :

    Awakened before
    Sun rise; a sound deep within
    Crashing on a shore

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  2. Jessan Dunn Otis|Writer Post author

    Thank you for your reply. I know the strict form of the traditional haiku. I appreciate your edit. However, for me, the essence of the piece is as it was originally written and posted. Even traditional forms of poetry can be expanded and made new.

    If you were to give this piece another identification in terms of form – what do you suggest?

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