“Summer Haiku” 4 Replies Summer Haiku Awakened before sun’s rise A sound inside my dream Crashing ocean on distant shore ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ (c)7.23.17 Jessan Dunn Otis Share this:TweetEmailPrintMoreWhatsAppLike this:Like Loading... Related
been there, done that… the Abrolhos Islands… how it is.
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Thank you, as always, Rick. How it is…still. 🙂
Good one but a Haiku should conform to 5-7-5 syllables meter.
In my opinion, you can edit it as :
Sun rise; a sound deep within
Crashing on a shore
Thank you for your reply. I know the strict form of the traditional haiku. I appreciate your edit. However, for me, the essence of the piece is as it was originally written and posted. Even traditional forms of poetry can be expanded and made new.
If you were to give this piece another identification in terms of form – what do you suggest?